Voyager Redux! “Mock One”

BeFunky CollageHow does a bastard, orphan, son of a whore and a   

Scotsman, dropped in the middle of a

Forgotten spot in the Caribbean by providence

Impoverished, in squalor

Grow up to be a hero and a scholar?

-Aaron Burr, “Hamilton”

As you can see, I’ve solved the mystery, folks: James Fraser is actually Alexander Hamilton.

Well, okay, maybe not. But around the same time period, and in the same part of the world, James Fraser is about to have an adventure that rivals Hamilton’s. So let’s get started with this week’s installment of Voyager Redux!

Ron Moore mentioned at the Writers’ Guild Panel that, when beginning work on a season of Outlander, the writing team go through the book du jour (in this case, Voyager) and break it up into 13 “mini-stories” that will form the basis of each of the 13 episodes*.

So herewith, we’re going to play my favorite game: Let’s Pretend We’re TV Writers (AKA: Dress for the Job You Want!), and make our best guesses as to what each of the 13 episodes will include, keeping in mind the THEME of Voyager, which we discussed last week, namely: the conflict between ENSLAVEMENT and FREEDOM (both of which can be physical, mental and spiritual).

To get started, I’ve created a CHEAT SHEET in which I break down the nine segments of Voyager and detail their major plot points. Go ahead and check it out.

Now Voyager, being one of the longest of the “big novels,” as Diana calls them, packs in quite a bit of story in its 900 or so pages. In fact, most writers probably would have gone ahead and made this thing into at least two books, if not three. After all, if you asked me what the plot of Voyager is, I would probably put on my “writer hat” (which, yes, does come with a complementary case of writers’ block and vat of Scotch in which to drown one’s sorrows), and say the following:

Claire and Jamie, reunited 20 years after the Battle of Culloden, must sail for the East Indies (AKA Jamaica and surrounding islands) to rescue Jamie’s kidnapped nephew Ian Junior.

Those of us who have read the book would probably read this and say, “Well, yeah, but…”

But guess what? This plotline isn’t even introduced until about halfway through the novel! There’s a whole book’s worth of plot to get through before Jamie feels the first tinge of seasickness. But Ron Moore mentioned something else recently: It’s the boat stuff he can’t wait to shoot! And with good reason. Man, that’s some exciting, super-cinematic stuff right there. And that’s not even counting all the crazy set pieces and new characters we meet when we get to the islands.

Now here’s the problem, and it’s a big one for the people trying to make this into a TV show: The first 200 pages of this book—about 22% of it—are really heavily weighted to Jamie’s story, and he has a LOT OF IT to get through.

In the 20 years of their separation, we see very little of Claire’s storyline. There’s some flashbacks to Bree being a baby, of course, and Claire’s decision to go to medical school. And then there is a flashback to the night that Frank died. We meet Joe Abernathy and learn that he was an important friend. Other than that, a lot of it is left up to the imagination.

Here’s what Jamie does in those 20 years: Spends seven years in a cave; watches Fergus lose his hand; surrenders himself to British forces; spends several more years at Ardsmuir Prison where he forms a crucial friendship with his warden, Lord John Grey; escapes prison after hearing the dying words of Duncan Kerr and goes to discover the hidden treasure on the Silkies’ Island; returns to prison and rejects the advances of Lord John Grey; is indentured to Helwater where he (begrudgingly) takes the virginity of the headstrong Geneva Dunsany; inadvertently fathers a child (Willie); murders the raving husband of Geneva (after she dies in childbirth); and eventually moves to Edinburgh where he forms an identity as a booze smuggler/ printer (under the guise of his middle name Malcolm).

That’s what’s professionally known as “a lot.” In fact, Jamie has so much storyline to get through in those 200 pages that I could easily create a 13-episode story arc JUST ABOUT THAT, and we would never even see Claire.

This is a headache for TV writers who have to deliver episodes in which BOTH of their protagonists feature strongly. In the book, Diana was able to get away with simply putting the Claire story on the back burner for a lot of this, but that doesn’t work in TV.

But as we all know, as interesting as all that stuff is, what we REALLY want to see is the print-shop scene. I can’t tell you how many comments I’ve gotten on recent threads that are basically just: “Give me the print-shop scene.” I get it! I hear you! I want to see them reunite as well. (And no, it can’t happen in episode three after watching Claire, Bree and Roger read old documents and enjoy the benefits of indoor plumbing while cross-cutting to Jamie doing ALL THAT DRAMATIC STUFF.)

So… wearing our writer hats, how do we solve this problem?

Here’s what I would do:

EPISODE ONE:

TITLE: WHEN I AM THY CAPTIVE

THEME: CAPTIVITY. Jamie and Claire end their parallel stories of “captivity” (ie: leading a false life) and “escape” back to each other

BOOK CHAPTERS COVERED:

PART ONE: BATTLE, AND THE LOVES OF MEN:

These short three chapters are only 4% of the book, and they include Claire’s memories of being home with the infant Brianna while missing Jamie, and the modern-day (1968) research of trying to find what happened to Jamie.

PART THREE: WHEN I AM THY CAPTIVE:

Includes: Jamie’s time in prison, including his escape to look for the lost treasure; there’s a one-page chapter at the end in which Roger tells Brianna that he has found Jamie.

PART FIVE: YOU CAN’T GO HOME AGAIN:

In which Claire, well, goes home again to Boston to settle her affairs. It includes the flashback to the night Frank died, and the discovery of the cave body with Joe Abernathy. Back in Scotland, Roger finds the deed of Sasine, (which of course we have already done in ep 213). And then through the stones.

TREATMENT:

SUPER: APRIL 16, 1746, CULLODEN FIELD, SCOTLAND

Jamie’s eyes open on the battlefield of Culloden. He looks down. Sees blood. The body of Black Jack Randall lays prostrate across his middle. Carnage everywhere. Is he alive? Is he dead? Is he somewhere in between? His leg gushes blood, the pain excruciating.

This stuff practically shoots itself.

As he lies, looking up to heaven, seeing some trace of Claire there perhaps, we cut to…

SUPER: 1968, BOSTON

Claire lies back in a luxurious bath, looking up to the ceiling tiles, her eyes faraway; later, she walks into the bedroom and remembers… FLASHBACK: the night she and Frank fought in this very bedroom; the night he died. This room was her prison, in a way. A photograph of Brianna on a shelf is the only thing that makes her smile. She takes it out of the frame and puts it in her pocket.

1755

Nine years after Culloden, Lord John Grey arrives at Ardsmuir and the departing warden, Colonel Quarry (AKA: Johnny Exposition) says something to the effect of: “Be careful of the men’s leader. They call him Mac Dubh. He’s an educated man, but a savage. Spent seven years hiding in a cave after Culloden. If you play chess with him, don’t turn your back.” So… pretty much what he says in the book.

Grey does play chess with Jamie, and immediately falls for him. As he reaches for the Queen, we cut to…

1968

Joe Abernathy putting down a romance novel.

Claire has come to his office to say goodbye; the body of the mystery woman from the cave is introduced.

1755

Jamie is brought to the sickbed of Duncan Kerr and hears his final confession.

1968

Claire comes back to Scotland. Finishes prepping her penicillin syringes and buying a dress for her voyage. Roger provides her with old coins to bring with her. Brianna watches, anxious.

They take a boat on Loch Ness. Claire gazes across the water. “Do you believe?” she asks. She’s referring the Loch Ness Monster, but the real question is clear: Are You a Believer?

She jingles the ancient coins in her hands. “They’re worth a small fortune,” Roger assures her. “In those times, anyway.” “Yes,” she agrees. “A fortune.”

Looking into the shadows beyond the loch, we cut to…

1755

Jewels, glistening in reflected moonlight. Jamie slams the lid on the small box that holds them. He hears the dogs barking, the men calling out. He is trapped on an island.

The dogs continue their hunt. They’re looking for Jamie along the cliffs when suddenly… Jamie presents himself, dripping wet, his hands empty. Lord Grey tells the men to stand down, to take Jamie back to the prison.

Lord Grey tries to induce Jamie to tell him where the “gold”—for he thinks it’s gold—is hiding. Jamie won’t do it. Lord Grey admits that he wants to help Jamie. The other men are being sent to America as indentured servants. But not Jamie; he’s going to Helwater. Grey makes a pass at him and Jamie says: “Take your hand away or I’ll kill you.”

1968

Bree and Roger drive Claire to the stones. It is time to say goodbye. They can hardly bear it. Will they ever see each other again?

1756

Another goodbye. Lord Grey must watch Jamie go. “I’ll visit you at Helwater.” Jamie, despite his earlier outburst, sincerely likes Grey. “Please do. Lest my sole company will be the spoilt bairn of my new master.” And Grey reminds him, “It’s only for a few years. Then you’ll be free.”

Jamie walks away.

And speaking of free…

1968

Claire hears the buzzing, takes a deep breath… and walks through the stones.

THE END

We pick up Episode two in 1766 or so with Claire making her way to the center of Edinburgh and finding the print shop of “A. Malcolm, Printer.”

But, but, but… I can hear you saying. But… what about the great stuff with Jenny where she has to pretend the newborn baby was stillborn because Jamie is hiding with it in the closet? What about Fergus losing his hand? And for Pete’s sake, what about Geneva Dunsany and Willie??

The answer is, we’ll see these things in flashback during the course of the season, at times when they are plot pertinent, or in some cases, we won’t see them at all. Some things are simply going to have to go. (The Geneva stuff, for instance, will probably be shown in flashback much later when Claire learns about it. That way we—the audience—can be just as surprised as she is when we hear about it with her.)

What we DO keep in this episode is all the stuff that is necessary to serve the plot throughout the season: ie: the introduction of the “French Gold” (or, you know, jewels) which will be important later; the introduction of the “Mystery Cave Body” that Claire and Joe dissect, which will be important later; the relationship with Lord John Grey, which will be… well, you get the idea.

So the first episode—or my version of it, anyway—will take us through chapter 24, or 27% of the way through the book. That way we have 12 more episodes to do all the other great stuff.

What do you guys think?

*NOTE, 7/25/16: Savvy reader Carmen Mackey pointed out that season three might be only 10 episodes, and it seems she might be right. In an interview with the Hollywood Reporter, Ron Moore said: “We have scripts for the first few episodes and stories broken somewhere into 10 episodes.” So sounds like a curtailed season this year, unless plans change, which is unlikely since production has already begun. Hmm, I’m going to have to adjust the game plan accordingly. Tune in next week to see how!

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31 thoughts on “Voyager Redux! “Mock One”

  1. I could be wrong, but I feel like this is a little TOO condensed a version. At least I hope it is – so much enjoyable stuff from the book omitted. Loved the structure of the book which volleyed between pieces of research gleaned by Bree & Roger with the actual events that Jamie lived thru. Reminds me of what was done in Episode 213 weaving the present (1968) and the past (1746). Also, you need to correct your date !!! Claire goes back 202 years from 1968 to the year 1766. By saying 1788 you totally eliminate the possibility of historic events that happen in the later books – such as the Revolutionary War !!!!!!!!!!!! Liked your idea of leaving the story of how Willie came to be to unwind when Lord John Grey tells Claire about the boy in Jamaica (though I am not sure that Lord John in the book knows all the details – but hey, in the TV version we could assume Jamie confided all to him at some point before leaving Helwater).

    P.S. Really enjoyed your Voyage Cheat Sheet – a good quick review summary for those of us who have actually read the books but can never remember all the detail. This summary hits many important events and hopefully calls to mind others which you were not able to include (after all – you are not rewriting the book – just a summary 🙂

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  2. HMMM? I like it, love it, but, I would start it all with Claire coming back to the print shop,making the first episode EPIC, and from there, when they talk, all the flash backs, just like they did in season 1 with Jamie’s rape, and also with episode Faith, when Claire tells Jamie about losing their baby. During these talks, they get to know each other and learn to love each other again, intimacy and lots of sex involved LOL. Claire tells him all about Brianna and Frank, and all them 20 years, and Jamie tells her all about the death of BJR, going home, Fergus arm, the cave, Ardsmuir, Helwater (kinda). While all the flash backs, we can integrate Jamie’s business to put some action, meeting the preacher, the brothel etc. This all should take us to mid season with no breaks though, lol. Then they get to Lallybroch and all hell breaks lose with Laoghaire (all in real time) and here we go to the Silkies Island, Wee Ian gets abducted, and we go to the Caribbean. (Notice I said Helwater (kinda) not the part of being the 9th Earl’s dad. That’s another flash when Claire meets Lord John in Jamaica or maybe even leave it for season 4! Do all the ships and storms Hispaniola, Jamaica, go through it all just like in the book and end it when Claire falls of the ship and breaks her leg, and Jamie has no clue as where she is….leaving a cliff hanger for season 4….Taa daaa!! What do you think? LOL Thank you so much for the opportunity to become RDM LOL at least for a few minutes LOL!

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  3. Wow. This is fantastic! Did you do this for the first two books? I have long wanted to see someone other than Ron Moore do a treatment for Outlander so I am really pleased to see this. I so want to understand why people like Ron Moore make the choices they do. I look forward to reading more.

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  4. Episode 213 the finale of season 2 focused much of the time on 1968 with Claire, Roger and Brianna. Not so much about Jamie. So I think it’s important for the viewers to see what Jamie has had to endure for the 20 years that he and Claire have been apart. The cave. Fergus. Jenny. Imprisonment.
    Intermittently there can be moments where we see Claire in Boston. (If Joe Abernathy appears later on, then it would be important to introduce him as Claire’s friend; otherwise he (as well as Geneva at Helwater) can be glossed over).
    So Episode 1 could show Jamie lying at Culloden, partially covered by the dead body of Black Jack. Spend some time with Jamie, the cave, Fergus and Jenny. I think all of that is important to show the pain, despair and loneliness Jamie has had to endure. Claire had Brianna and her medical career to carry her through those long years. A brief look at Claire in Boston before she departs for Scotland. Flashback at some point in Episode 1 showing Frank’s death.
    I do agree though, that it’s VERRA important to get to the print shop PDQ – maybe by Episode 2. After all, it’s Jamie and Claire’s eternal love story that the books are all about. I have a somewhat different opinion about how long it takes them to re-connect. I think it takes about 40 seconds! They are soulmates, and would be shocked, then the tears would come, and then the kisses and embraces, and the printshop floor (as long as there is no carpet) where they consummate their reunion!
    That’s all for now.

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  5. I also think it is a little too condensed. I think it will take them at least 2, or maybe 3 episodes to get Claire back through the stones. There should be some time around discovery (of where Jamie is now/then (+20yrs)) by Claire and Roger/Bree and enough of a story around Jenny, Fergus and the cave; Ardsmore prison and Helwater. We need him in Helwater long enough to give his Rosary to you know who before he leaves. That gives them 10 episodes for everything else, and frankly there is a lot of the rest of the book that they can abbreviate (the ship voyage(s) were too long in the book for me anyway), and I would rather see them get to Aunt Jacosta’s much quicker than in the book (they can skip most of the East Indies stuff) which is when they meet Bonnet anyway.

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    1. I agree with Kathleen that Rebecca’s storyline is a bit too condensed. I would like to see more of Jamie and how he survives 20 years without Claire. Otherwise, this is all great stuff! Many thanks to Rebecca for the synopsis of Voyager chapters.

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  6. First, great catch on the Hamilton parallel. Second, and more troubling to me, R. Moore has recently said that they are going to spend time exploring Frank’s life more. He finds him fascinating and wants to delve into his motivations. And finally, Sam recently hinted that BJR did not die on the battlefield…? I like your thinking though. And, don’t drop the thread you started last time about Faith vs ??? (forgot the word you used).. I really think you have something there in your analysis. Thanks..

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  7. When will we meet the mature Fergus? And who will play Bonnet? And Ian Jr? Fergus wife? Mercy the book “voyager” could be four books, it was so full…ONE OF MY FAVORITES! I know you can’t use it all, but don’t leave out so much either! Please!

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  8. This is so interesting! I do feel like the constant cutting between times can make a scene lose its power (the buildup to Culloden should have felt more momentous, but it felt rushed). I would rather they CUT parts of the book than fail to do he biggest scenes justice. I know it’s painful for book fans, but the reality is that a book can do things in depth the way a tv show cannot!! And vice versa – tv can show amazing images. I hope they choose plot lines and fully develop them!! Just my humble opinion! 🙂

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    1. Where did you see Season 3 might have 10 episodes? I’ve only seen this which is a quote from Maril Davis: “Expressing her thoughts on Outlander Season 3 number of episodes, she said, “I think we will kind of stick to 13 as we move forward.” She also added, “We feel like 13 is an appropriate amount and if we tried to do more, it would put a strain on production and it would be even longer between seasons.”
      I certainly hope they don’t cut from 13 episodes to 10 !! It was bad enough that they cut Season 2 down from Season 1’s 16 episodes to 13 episodes.

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  9. Great job. You are correct about having to leave some things out until later. It sounds like a great plan, maybe they will take some of your ideas.

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  10. I totally agree that there is so much that goes on during Voyager that it seems so hard to condense it into just 10, hopefully 13 episodes. But, saying that, I enjoyed your breakdown and how it might go. I will eagerly await the show to see what happens. To the comment referring to Aunt Jocasta and Steven Bonnet – they do not come in to play until book 4 – Drums of Autumn.

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    1. Yes, I agree with you. I like the picture in the book of Jamie lying on the battlefield slowly regaining consciousness and discovering the bloody DEAD body of BJR. There are many new characters turning up in Voyager, and with limited time in adapting the book to the screen, it makes sense to move on from the character of Frank; we’ve already seen more of him on screen than in the books. Claire is ready to go back to the stones to find her sweet Jamie . . and so are the readers and viewers of Outlander (IMO).

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  11. […] Bienvenidos, my Outlander-lovin’ friends. Very excited to be back this week, talking about to Voyager (AKA: Outlander Season Three). To be clear, for people who have just jumped on this crazy train, these are mock episodes that I’m creating based on the novel Voyager. I have no idea what’s ACTUALLY going to happen next season, but based on these Entertainment Weekly pics, I’m guessing we’re going to open with Culloden. (So at least I got that much right in MOCK ONE!) […]

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